We all really enjoyed this activity and then went back and worked on stretching some of the sentences in our individual writing. Now we are going to look at starting sentences in a variety of ways to add interest.
Sunday 11 March 2018
Streeeeeetching Sentences
Throughout the year we are focusing on using description to enhance our writing across genres. We have started writing descriptive paragraphs to go with our science inquiry. Our initial sentences were a little boring so Mrs P set us a challenge. In groups we were given one of the sentences that many of us had used in our initial paragraphs. The sentence we were given was: The Nikau Palm is a tree. I think you will all agree that this sentence could be improved upon! We then got to chop up this sentence and add/delete/rearrange words until we were satisifed that we had made an awesome descriptive sentence. Here are some of the sentences we came up with.
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ReplyDeleteI Liked How You Spelled Moari Wrong But ill Help U (Moari)
Deletei ike how you used maori words
DeleteHello Room 2 Mr Vega from Wesley Primary School my students from W.P.S will be making comments on your blog this morning ... enjoy our comments
ReplyDeleteNice Description writing Room 2
ReplyDeletethank you for nice comment
DeleteI like how you are Stretching words out i did this when i was in room 9 when i was younger keep up the good effort!
ReplyDeletehi, my name is gamado and I'm from Wesley primary room 4 i like that you glued it on papper and i also like that you wrote about Nikau Maori tree
ReplyDeleteTalofa ,lava Room 2 It's Brendan from Wesley primary school and I am a year 6.I really like the way that you guys are learning Maori words. That's it from me blog you later !!!
ReplyDeleteHey Brandan it is me Araura from (WPS) maybe you could read the heading because you have made a little mistake it is a descriptive piece of writing actually.
DeleteHi room 2 my name is Araura from Wesley Primary School i like how you have been learning to write a descriptive piece of writing only using The Nikau palm tree maybe the sentences could be nice and clear so we can read them.
ReplyDeleteNice work on making stretchy words.
ReplyDeletehi grey main school my names yonatan I really like your discriptive wrirting keep it up.
ReplyDeleteHi there, my name is Luseane and i am a student in room 4 at Wesley Primary School. I really like how you guys put a lot of detail into it and you described it really well. This kind of reminds of Maori. Maybe next time you could write a bit clearer. If you would like to see, my class blog is https://wpsvega.blogspot.co.nz/ but well done!
ReplyDeleteHello Room 2, My name is Tufui I like the way you guys are doing a descriptive piece of writing. That reminded me of when I did that once when I was younger. Maybe next time you guys can make the writing clear to see and also you guys can do a video of you guys reading.
ReplyDeleteHi i think it's moari words because of the text
ReplyDeleteHi my name Genesis from Wesley primary school in room 4. I like how you guys are stretching out the words and keep up the good work!!!! If you want to check out our blog here it is just copy the link- https://wpsvega.blogspot.co.nz/
ReplyDeleteHi my name is zjaylon i like what u guys are doing
ReplyDeleteHi my name is Isabel from Wesley Primary School I like how you are learning Maori words also I like how you are doing what they are in English to
ReplyDeleteKia ora my name is Terei. I like your guys Nikau tree and I like the sentences that you all wrote bye.
ReplyDeleteHi, My name is Georgia from Ohaeawai Primary. I like how you all chose the Nikau palm tree. Your sentences were very cool. From Georgia.
ReplyDeleteHi, My name is Ethan. I like your sentences about the Nikau Palms - we have lots of Nikau Palms in our forests in Northland too.
ReplyDeleteGREAT o your school can mabye learn the same too.BLOG YOU LATER
Deletekea Ora i like your story's about the Nikau Palm trees but maybe next time you could make them look more colourful and interesting so you want read it and look at it . Can we do this again Mrs p ??? it was really fun but we need to make it more colourful next time.
ReplyDeleteKIA ORA,My name is Gladys and i go to Wesley primary school. I really enjoyed looking at your learning also keep it up i like it! Well done!
ReplyDeleteKIA ORA, my name is Isabel and I like how you guys are learning Maori words and connecting them to English words. good work! keep it up!
ReplyDeleteHello room 2 my name is charlotte I am from Wesley primary school I am in room 4 I like how youś wore making story I like them so much one day at home me and my sisters will all ways play mum and dad so my big sister will all ways say go and writ a story about school fin what are you going to do she said just shut up and go and do your story about school now I said okay okay then .
ReplyDeletehi my name Damsey I am in room 4 we are a year 5,6 class i like it room 2
ReplyDeleteHello Room 2,
ReplyDeleteMy name is Tufui and I am a student from Wesley Primary School in Room 4. I like the way you were making storys using words. Bye blog you later!
Hi room 2 my Name is Tuku from Wesley Primary School i like how you are learning new words and sounding it out bit by bit keep up the hard and challenging work.
ReplyDeleteHi my name is Gladys from wesley primary and i really liked your work and how you connected the words together. Love the work Keep it up.
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ReplyDeleteI Like Your Streeeeeetchy Sentences Well Nice Work On Doing Some Other Words
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ReplyDeleteHi, my name is gammado from Wesley Primary and I really like how you guys are learning maori words you guys know more about maori words than me. if you want to check out my class blog https://wpsvega.blogspot.com/
ReplyDeleteHello room 2 it´s me Tuku from wesley primary school i like how you guys are stretching your words out carefully and learning new words keep it up and have good wonderful day.
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